Tom And Jerry The Great

Posted by maahadm2016 on Friday Jan 8, 2016 Under 100 word challenge, 100wc, Wootton

Long ago, there was a island in danger. This was a job for two best builders, Tom and Jerry. Can they do it in time before Lord Sugar takes over the world?…The two men worked day and night trying to create a force field to protect their land.Suddenly, one of the villagers shouted, “He’s getting closer! “As soon as Tom and Jerry heard the news they worked harder than they ever worked before.1o day later, they were nearly done all they needed to was power up the force field. They powered up  the force field and the village was save

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3 Responses to “Tom And Jerry The Great”

  1. MrCrilly Says:

    A good first blog Maahad. I think your interpretation of the picture was very interesting and you have started to develop an intriguing plot.

    Have you used speech punctuation accurately?

    Can you find three places in your writing where you could improve your language choices in order to engage your audience?

      

  2. niamhm2016 Says:

    This was a great blog!

    can you use any better words though?

      

  3. charlottel2016 Says:

    Great first blog you did good!

      

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