Was it my mother?

Posted by jessicak2016 on Monday Feb 22, 2016 Under 100 word challenge, 100wc, Wootton

If I didn’t go dancing, if I didn’t trip,if I didn’t come first place, then I wouldn’t be in this state.

Hello my name is Lilly. I am 10 years old, and I am a very special dancer even though I won a first place award so not that special only joking.

After that, I went swimming. Before we entered the dreaded cold pool. I stepped in. I tripped. I fell.

The next thing I know I was in a hospital bed with a green block around my head and a huge gas machine next to my bed but it was attached to my nose and mouth. A lady walked in was she my mum or not? Was it more likely a stranger!…

3 Responses to “Was it my mother?”

  1. joshk2016 Says:

    Great story. How did she forget who her mum was? How did she trip in the pool?WELL DONE!


  2. alfiec2016 Says:

    I want to read on because you’ve left the reader on a cliff hanger


  3. rebeccam2016 Says:

    Well done I like the cliff hanger at the end I want to read more please make another story continuing this very good piece of writing!


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